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Thread: Circus: Your Love Is Amazing (Rhymes? Excruciating)
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Brenton Brown's Your Love Is Amazing is surely a contender for the Crappy Choruses thread, but I thought it might also make for a Circus game.
The structure is basically as follows:
Verse:
AAAB
CCCB
Chorus:
Hallelujah, hallelujah, hallelujah, your love makes me sing x2
The aim of the author seems to have been to make the three rhyming lines as excruciating as possible, as in
Your love is surprising
I can feel it rising
All the joy that's growing
Deep inside of me
But I feel sure Shipmates would be up to the challenge of finding rhymes that are even worse.
Suggested rules as follows:
One poster supplies lines AA ('your love is...')
Next poster supplies lines AB
Another poster supplies lines CC ('your love is...')
Next poster supplies lines CB
(for extra style points, a poster is then allowed to post the chorus at this point before we start again).
To start us off, here are two "AA" lines:
Your love is amusing
I find it enthusing...
[ 17. October 2015, 09:34: Message edited by: Doublethink. ]
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Raptor Eye
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I just can't help myself
When I see your eyes.
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Be still, and know that I am God! Psalm 46.10
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jacobsen
seeker
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Sorry, Raptor, but there is a rhyme scheme. Hope you don't mind if I follow it.
quote:
Originally posted by Eutychus:
Your love is amusing
I find it enthusing...
But your touch is quite bruising,
Be gentle with me.
[ 16. May 2015, 16:39: Message edited by: jacobsen ]
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But God, holding a candle, looks for all who wander, all who search. - Shifra Alon
Beauty fades, dumb is forever-Judge Judy
The man who made time, made plenty.
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Eutychus
From the edge
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That's the idea, jacobsen!
Your love is astounding
I hear it resounding
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Raptor Eye
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quote:
Originally posted by jacobsen:
Sorry, Raptor, but there is a rhyme scheme. Hope you don't mind if I follow it.
Thank you jacobsen, I tried to delete it but missed the edit window. I'll fetch my coat.
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Be still, and know that I am God! Psalm 46.10
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L'organist
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I feel my heart pounding,
I'm longing for thee
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Rara temporum felicitate ubi sentire quae velis et quae sentias dicere licet
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Ooh, I get to post a chorus!
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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Your love is uplifting
But my mind is drifting...
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Piglet
Islander
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And the sands they are shifting
By the edge of the sea.
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I may not be on an island any more, but I'm still an islander.
alto n a soprano who can read music
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Eutychus
From the edge
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better than Welles (Orson)
No Citizen Kane for me...
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jacobsen
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My, turn, my turn!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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But God, holding a candle, looks for all who wander, all who search. - Shifra Alon
Beauty fades, dumb is forever-Judge Judy
The man who made time, made plenty.
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Amanda B. Reckondwythe
Dressed for Church
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[Does that mean that I, as the next poster, get to start a rhyme?]
Your love makes my belly
Run over like jelly.
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Piglet
Islander
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while giving it "welly" *
In hymns sung to Thee.
* i.e. singing lustily and with good courage ![[Big Grin]](biggrin.gif)
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I may not be on an island any more, but I'm still an islander.
alto n a soprano who can read music
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Your love is perplexing
I sometimes find it vexing
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Wet Kipper
Circus Runaway
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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Your love is so crazy
Even when I'm lazy
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- insert randomly chosen, potentially Deep and Meaningful™ song lyrics here -
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Pia
Shipmate
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As fresh as a daisy
In the fields growing free
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pimple
Ship's Irruption
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Your love's like a chocolate
digestive - a rock lit
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In other words, just because I made it all up, doesn't mean it isn't true (Reginald Hill)
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Amanda B. Reckondwythe
Dressed for Church
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And forcibly out-spit
To land on your knee.
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Your love is fantastic
And it's quite elastic
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Let's remember that we are to build the Kingdom of God, not drive people away - pastor Frank Pomeroy
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Dafyd
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Your collection takes plastic
So cash I needn't carry.
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we remain, thanks to original sin, much in love with talking about, rather than with, one another. Rowan Williams
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kingsfold
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Your love is eternal,
More than just paternal
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jrw
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unlike that of the colonel
who doesn't even offer us a cup of tea
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Amanda B. Reckondwythe
Dressed for Church
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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Your love fits the scansion
Like rooms in a mansion
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Dafyd
Shipmate
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Your love is like whisky
It makes me feel frisky
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L'organist
Shipmate
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As cute as a pixie
Who's longing to hear
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing! x2
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Rara temporum felicitate ubi sentire quae velis et quae sentias dicere licet
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jacobsen
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Your love is ecstatic
And quite charismatic
[ 20. May 2015, 12:07: Message edited by: jacobsen ]
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Beauty fades, dumb is forever-Judge Judy
The man who made time, made plenty.
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Charles Had a Splurge on
Shipmate
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And just like my attic,
It's full to the brim
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Your love is enduring
And it's not inuring...
/If I get a chance, I'll turn this into an audio recording at some point!
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Amanda B. Reckondwythe
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And rather alluring
But subject to whim.
[ 20. May 2015, 18:18: Message edited by: Amanda B. Reckondwythe ]
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing! x2
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Let's remember that we are to build the Kingdom of God, not drive people away - pastor Frank Pomeroy
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jrw
Shipmate
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Your love's like a nice dream
You buy me an ice cream
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Pia
Shipmate
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Like a teen fan-girl I'll scream:
'I love you so much!'.
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Amanda B. Reckondwythe
Dressed for Church
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Your love's a reflection
Of ice-cream perfection
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Charles Had a Splurge on
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Raises my predilection
I long for your touch
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"But to live outside the law, you must be honest" R.A. Zimmerman
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jacobsen
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing! x2
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Your love's my ambition,
No thought of sedition
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But God, holding a candle, looks for all who wander, all who search. - Shifra Alon
Beauty fades, dumb is forever-Judge Judy
The man who made time, made plenty.
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Wet Kipper
Circus Runaway
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Lord you have been Fishin'
I'm caught in your net
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Gracie
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Your love is expanding
It is just outstanding
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When someone is convinced he’s an Old Testament prophet there’s not a lot you can do with him rationally. - Sine
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Eutychus
From the edge
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But could be quite demanding
Do you want to bet?
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L'organist
Shipmate
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Hallelujah
Hallelujee
Riddle-me-ro
Riddle-me-ring
Hallelujah
Hallelujah
Hallelujah
Your love makes me sing
(I thought we could do with a change?)
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Rara temporum felicitate ubi sentire quae velis et quae sentias dicere licet
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Charles Had a Splurge on
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Your love is contagious
I feel like a magus
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Nenya
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It pierces through my tragus,
I just wanna shout.
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Charles Had a Splurge on
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I wanna shout “hurrh”!
Gold, frankincense, myrrh
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"But to live outside the law, you must be honest" R.A. Zimmerman
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jacobsen
seeker
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Love sticks like a burr
Which never comes out
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But God, holding a candle, looks for all who wander, all who search. - Shifra Alon
Beauty fades, dumb is forever-Judge Judy
The man who made time, made plenty.
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Eutychus
From the edge
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Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Hallelujah!
Your love makes me sing
x2
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Let's remember that we are to build the Kingdom of God, not drive people away - pastor Frank Pomeroy
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no prophet's flag is set so...
Proceed to see sea
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Your love is a looking glass
Through which I see my large ass
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Out of this nettle, danger, we pluck this flower, safety.
\_(ツ)_/
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Eutychus
From the edge
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That it can nevertheless encompass
(where are the bathroom scales?)
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Charles Had a Splurge on
Shipmate
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I’m riding on my donkey,
heading for the long quay
[ 21. May 2015, 15:11: Message edited by: Charles Had a Splurge on ]
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